The Miss Elaine-ous Life

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A Year

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It was a year since he had seen her.


And now here she was, holding a baby, about 3 months old.


He looked into his own eyes as he approached.

I wrote this for this prompt from Write On Edge:
Let’s lighten it up around here. And when I say lighten, I mean REALLY lighten.


This week’s assignment will require the fewest number of words ever: we want you to write a story – your choice of topic – as a tweet.


That’s right. One hundred and forty characters. Not words. Characters.


Make us laugh. Make us think. Make us want more.

Comments

  14. Yes, this grabs you. That last line is absolutely killer. So touching, and it’s taking me longer to write this than the entire thing.

    That’s the power of perfectly selected words. Well done.

  29. Loved him seeing his own eyes. This could end a story or be the beginning of one…or a series of stories or novels! :>

  38. I love how this told a story, and yet made me even more curious.

    Small piece of concrit: most guys have no idea how to tell how old a baby is, especially if they’ve never raised one, and the size ranges between the top 90% and the lower 5% or preemie are huge.

    So I think it would’ve been more believeable to phrase it, “holding a small baby” instead of an actual age.

    Nit picky thing: same thing about the eyes – as they often change color at that age. I know what you’re going for though, so maybe make it about the shape of the eyes, or of another facial feature?

    Hard to do in 140 characters, I know.

    But I want to know the story. Darn it. You have completely intrigued me, and I can almost see the drool…